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Headline Re-Writes

November 16th, 2008
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Before:

“Discover The Absolute Easiest Way To Make Money From The Long Tail”
This Simple Strategy Lets You Take Advantage Of
How People Shop Online And Become A True Super Affiliate…

After:

How I Earned $9,746.64 in 30 Days FLAT! Using Dirt Cheap “Long Tail” Keywords Matched To The Way Buyers THINK! - Making Me an INSTANT Super Affiliate and Bringing My Competitors To Their Knees

Before:

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After:

Discover How Our Virtual Assistants Triple YOUR productivity, Free Up Your Mental Band With and Keep You Focused & Organized - Guaranteed, Or Our Services are FREE!

Before: Nada

After:

How To Make Peace With Your Ex and Re-gain The Love and Respect of Your Children - Without Being Victimized By Our Lop-Sided Legal System

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  1. Sadie Pippita
    November 16th, 2008 at 02:58 | #1
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    I love it!

  2. OutsideMyBrain
    November 16th, 2008 at 03:12 | #2
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    Excellent work… talk about being in a headline writing mood! :-o

  3. Becki Maxson
    November 16th, 2008 at 03:36 | #3
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    I tried to think of the major benefits — you can probably improve!

  4. rick
    November 16th, 2008 at 05:26 | #4
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    good start these simple re-writes show how important the headline is

    ps love your template nicely done.

  5. Mitch
    November 16th, 2008 at 11:21 | #5
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    Your RSS feed is not working. I have been trying to subscribe all day, thought that you would want to know.

  6. Anita Jefferson
    November 16th, 2008 at 17:03 | #6
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    Whew! I am impressed and I want to learn this techno-smart strategies.

  7. milford Walton
    November 19th, 2008 at 03:11 | #7
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    Very nice job. Doing that is really an art form I think. You seem to really have a knack for it.

    Milford
    http://www.allenwalton.com

  8. Kristof
    November 19th, 2008 at 03:14 | #8
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    Great rewrites except…

    Second after example: I think it’s supposed to be “Bandwidth” not “Band With”. Unless, of course, you have an orchestra in your head :)

  9. Jay Jenkins
    November 19th, 2008 at 03:16 | #9
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    Funny how those of us who know how to get great results with long-tail keywords when lots of “expert” SEO folks say it doesn’t work. Glad I’m not working for them LOL.

  10. Adonya Wong
    November 19th, 2008 at 07:09 | #10
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    Hey Perry.

    Most excellent post! Thank you for offering up some re-write examples.

    Looking forward to learning more marketing tidbits. :)

    Adonya Wong
    Author | Autism Activist | Blogger

  11. Steve O
    November 21st, 2008 at 21:30 | #11
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    Hey Perry, good article. Most headlines are so boring and average. I won’t even look at an article that doesn’t grab me with a strong teaser headline.

    Great blog, great content and awesome look.

    Steve O

  12. Juho Tunkelo
    November 23rd, 2008 at 09:18 | #12
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    Great stuff. Laying out the specifics and what they mean…

    PS. Please fix your blog feed, it’s broken. I can’t be the only one who’d rather read via RSS…

  13. Jan Verhoeff
    November 24th, 2008 at 04:31 | #13
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    Interesting copy you have there. I’m always amazed when copywriters put together their own sites. We either wow them with junk or play sadists and rework our stuff until it’s so crisp we can’t tell who wrote it… FLAVORLESS

    I personally prefer something in between…

    Way to go! You ROCK! (Deadly cliches, but they work.)

  14. Marta Costa
    December 3rd, 2008 at 06:57 | #14
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    These are awesome headlines. As a Virtual Assistant I absolutely love the line the line about freeing up mental bandwidth.

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